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First Haiku First Love - Stolen glances Nervous thrills First Date - Romantic dinner Separate bills First Heartbreak - Copious tears Body shudders First Recovery - New girl Heart flutters Lee  Live today as if it is your last For tomorrow will soon be in the past |
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I've never heard of Haiku before. As I was reading Lee's verse, not knowing it was Haiku, my only thoughts were that first dates in Malaysia are rarely romantic dinners, but usually just a coffee 
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Hi Minnie and Ted, As you know, this is my first haiku so all I can share with you is what I have learned. This is extracted from "Beginning Haiku Class" by myron. A haiku is a 3 line poem that consists of a phrase and a fragment where 2 of the lines comprise the phrase and the other line is the fragment. The fragment is either in the first or third lines. It is a good idea to put a punctuation mark after the fragment; usually a dash (-). Haiku is written in 17 syllables or less - preferably less. Haiku in English work the best around 10 to 12 syllables otherwise they become too wordy and cloud the image. A reader should be able to read the haiku and "see" the image from the words. Basically, a haiku is an unfinished poem - the reader work out what it means by putting the images together. Haiku is usually about nature but not necessarily so. Note: Try to make your words count not only in syllables. "Filler" words simply to make the syllable count usually detract from the image. The word "like" is something to stay away from. Repeating words like "the", "an", "a", "this", etc should be avoided but using it once in a poem is fine. Examples of haiku are as below: 1)surfing - the moon and I ride the waves 2) gloomy day - even the dog's ears droop Happy writing! Lee Live today as if it is your last For tomorrow will soon be in the past
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Hi potpourri, Just my luck! The first time I try to write a haiku and it's read by a haiku teacher!  I know the haikus are supposed to stand alone to portray the images but I want to tell a story.  Thank you for being lenient with me. Lee Live today as if it is your last For tomorrow will soon be in the past
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Hi starphysh, My luck is bad.  My first haiku and not only do I meet a haiku teacher, but also a haiku expert! You must be at the Advance Level. I have just read the introduction to the Beginning Haiku Class by myron; I have not even started class as yet. For beginners, I think the rules are more relaxed. Actually, I have come across haiku before but I found them to be too "deep" for me to fathom so I passed but yesterday, I came across some haiku which were light-hearted and fun. So I said,"Hey, I can do this". Haiku is supposed to stand alone but I have two problems: First, I want to tell a story and three short lines is not enough. Second, I like to rhyme. So by writing a multi-haiku, I can do both. I admit that I find rules to be too restrictive and sometimes interfere with the message I want to convey so I prefer to relax the rules a little. Writing, to me, should be fun and enjoyable; otherwise, I would rather play mahjong. Lee Live today as if it is your last For tomorrow will soon be in the past
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I've never heard of Haiku before. As I was reading Lee's verse, not knowing it was Haiku, my only thoughts were that first dates in Malaysia are rarely romantic dinners, but usually just a coffee I think Haiku originates from Japan where they usually write about nature and the seasons; roses symbolizes spring, fallen leaves symbolizes autumn, etc. I dispute your statement that first dates in Malaysia are usually just a coffee. Why, I remember that my dates with my wife were romantic dinners at the roadside hamburger stalls. Lee Live today as if it is your last For tomorrow will soon be in the past
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Sad to say now guys even slightly younger than you don't take a lady to roadside hamburger stalls......... just to a mamak for teh tarik  What is the world coming to!!!!!!!
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Hi whiterose, Well, look at it this way. I think it is only in Malaysia and Singapore that one can go on a date at the mamak stall for teh tarik and roti chanai (roti prata in Singapore). I quite like the roti tissue.Lee Live today as if it is your last For tomorrow will soon be in the past
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